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Tiny Star

Tiny Star

for D

There you are,
Shining like an aluminum dust
Brighter than the other’s

You’ve been dangling there
In the doomed sky
Together with your own

I once saw you in my dream
You were distant
But you could hear me talking

I sent my wish eight years ago
I hope it reached you by now
But how? You're light years away

There's no any chance
I could have you

There's no any chance
I could have you back

Now, I'm asking you to stay
(Wishing)
So I could see you
always
Every night,
Among all other stars
As tiny as you-
Shining

in their most
Brightest spark.
I'm wishing for you to stay-
Silent in the dark.

originally written: February 5, 2009

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pixie said...

it's interesting how one letter can be used to allude to two people! (wink wink)

happy valentines day best! mwah

Damsel said...

Two people? oooooopsssss.

Happy valentines too! :)

Pratik Rimal said...

Little Star

For D,

There you are,
Brighter than the other’s,
I once saw you, You were distant,
(But now, you are with me...you walk with me)
Could you hear me talking? and do you hear my voice?
I sent my wish sometime ago,
I hope it reached you by now, did it? You're a distance away...
There's no any chance,
I could have you,
There's no any chance,
I could have you back,
Now, I'm asking you to stay
(Wishing)
So I could see you
always
Every night,
Among all other stars
As tiny as you-
Shining
in their most
Brightest spark.
I'm wishing for you to stay-
Silent in the dark.

Happy Valentines Day to you too...both pixie and damsel... :-)

pixie said...

what's this, p? a reply to my best's poem or an edited version? mmmm

Pratik Rimal said...

A comment to Damsel's poem in an editied version...with my few words...words kept here and there....is it good? Pixie? :-) Damsel, is it good? That's for you. :-)

Damsel said...

@ Pixie

for D, for Damsel. Feeling pud ni P sa iyaha ang poem, c P man xa dili xa c D :( tsk tsk

@ P

Thanks P!
comment?
hmmmmmmm, I think mine is better, hahaha. :P Where art thou? :(

Pratik Rimal said...

Feeling pud ni P sa iyaha ang poem, c P man xa dili xa C? huh?

Welcome Damsel

yeah yeah...yours better. I'm here...

Damsel said...

hihihihihihi, silly! :P

Pratik Rimal said...

And then, I'm not silly...you silly... hehahahahahahahaha